tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post5805963610258132096..comments2024-03-09T03:47:52.346-07:00Comments on Naughty Netherworld Press: West Holpry: An Urban NightmareOrnery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost http://www.blogger.com/profile/07596105116325246476noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-49884377291245995562020-08-08T08:19:29.063-06:002020-08-08T08:19:29.063-06:00Breath catching. The description was vivid enough ...Breath catching. The description was vivid enough to elucidate a totalitarian regime lead by autocrat. Overt mention of it somewhat spoiled the fun.Sanhita Mukherjeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02343518865837305340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-4718927524089854142020-06-24T14:27:39.077-06:002020-06-24T14:27:39.077-06:00The descriptions in this piece conjure up such viv...The descriptions in this piece conjure up such vivid images. The characterizations as well. We see good and evil clearly. I'm intrigued, as someone who feels they have heard from relatives who are dead, is this trait common to the Ahprizite, or is it unique to Serab? Look forward to reading more!Donna Hantonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14620841692960550354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-68176932862345246982020-06-23T18:00:17.999-06:002020-06-23T18:00:17.999-06:002nd attempt at commenting: Great world-building - ...2nd attempt at commenting: Great world-building - vivid. Definitely an urban nightmare, and one that has to end. When will there be more, Cie? I enjoyed this.Roland Clarkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03302133565980901397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-70021718368912567042020-06-23T15:45:33.901-06:002020-06-23T15:45:33.901-06:00An engaging piece of fantasy with rich worldbuildi...An engaging piece of fantasy with rich worldbuilding and character development. Well done!Karunahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15186228086930843202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-5184390339062337442020-06-23T11:17:02.671-06:002020-06-23T11:17:02.671-06:00An intriguing take on the prompt, that easily hint...An intriguing take on the prompt, that easily hints at a grander plan. Well done. Christopher Scott Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08627870625577204377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-57101307487590814942020-06-22T22:06:38.041-06:002020-06-22T22:06:38.041-06:00Fantastic fantasy! Glad it worked to use the promp...Fantastic fantasy! Glad it worked to use the prompt with your characters.J Lenni Dornerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07961335286982498158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-84345180809462148032020-06-22T11:18:22.655-06:002020-06-22T11:18:22.655-06:00Great Cara, I think I have already commented on th...Great Cara, I think I have already commented on this. Do you have several sites. Wishing you an inspiring summer writing. S.Rouchard.Susan B.Rouchardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08801283790969288263noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-2051043573139178992020-06-21T04:05:53.291-06:002020-06-21T04:05:53.291-06:00Well done Cara ... I enjoyed your take and yes, as...Well done Cara ... I enjoyed your take and yes, as Jamie mentions, I too think there's a much longer story waiting to be told. Imaginative tale - take care ... HilaryHilary Melton-Butcherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17596532480645510678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-46890539092384079702020-06-21T03:37:38.628-06:002020-06-21T03:37:38.628-06:00Wonderful setting of scene and world. I was instan...Wonderful setting of scene and world. I was instantly plunged into the world of the story. Good luck to Serab!Shannon Lawrencehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00934641808195675935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-86820549198751058992020-06-20T15:23:54.487-06:002020-06-20T15:23:54.487-06:00Great world-building - vivid. Definately an urban ...Great world-building - vivid. Definately an urban nightmare, and one that has to end. Is there more to come, Cie? I enjoyed this.Roland Clarkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03302133565980901397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-40492888896881749942020-06-20T08:15:40.701-06:002020-06-20T08:15:40.701-06:00Interesting. I definitely got the sense it was par...Interesting. I definitely got the sense it was part of a bigger story, and then you said it was. I hope it works out for the prisoner.Jamiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12343722894608893190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-30866298791857908842020-06-19T20:18:50.568-06:002020-06-19T20:18:50.568-06:00Poor Serab is in a terrible position at the moment...Poor Serab is in a terrible position at the moment. I'm intrigued by the world you've built here and would love to know what befalls Serab after this piece ends. Well done!L.G. Keltnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07624902347418621283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-64189560487458457362020-06-19T04:52:02.229-06:002020-06-19T04:52:02.229-06:00Great world building imagery in this intriguing ex...Great world building imagery in this intriguing excerpt! Certainly sounds like a nightmare is waiting to unfold for the poor prisoner. Or is he in the middle of it already? Enjoyed reading, thanks.Nilanjana Bosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08656370320322301943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-49110405749648203452020-06-18T23:17:23.469-06:002020-06-18T23:17:23.469-06:00To paraquote a favorite song of mine by Beyonce, i...To paraquote a favorite song of mine by Beyonce, it could be a sweet dream or a beautiful nightmare. Or perhaps a bit of both. Although if Qweh has his way, no-one will wake up happy, if they wake up at all!Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost https://www.blogger.com/profile/07596105116325246476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-50977639816251422532020-06-18T23:16:18.312-06:002020-06-18T23:16:18.312-06:00Thank you, Sonia. It's one of many projects so...Thank you, Sonia. It's one of many projects so bits and pieces tend to appear here. :-)Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost https://www.blogger.com/profile/07596105116325246476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-8365194595936073612020-06-18T23:15:46.975-06:002020-06-18T23:15:46.975-06:00Thank you, Kalpana. I fear evil is a constant even...Thank you, Kalpana. I fear evil is a constant even in otherwise advanced societies.Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost https://www.blogger.com/profile/07596105116325246476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-78982658295243773982020-06-18T23:15:08.869-06:002020-06-18T23:15:08.869-06:00Thank you, Olga. :-)Thank you, Olga. :-)Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost https://www.blogger.com/profile/07596105116325246476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-79318231845615049282020-06-18T23:14:46.974-06:002020-06-18T23:14:46.974-06:00The King tends to be blinded by his own arrogance ...The King tends to be blinded by his own arrogance and self-aggrandizing. Thank you for visiting!Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost https://www.blogger.com/profile/07596105116325246476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-31094144803434577022020-06-18T23:12:41.725-06:002020-06-18T23:12:41.725-06:00Thank you, Pat. Serab is a clever fellow, and mayb...Thank you, Pat. Serab is a clever fellow, and maybe his street smarts will help him in this misadventure.Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost https://www.blogger.com/profile/07596105116325246476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-3804572577771440802020-06-18T21:11:51.483-06:002020-06-18T21:11:51.483-06:00I love the way the story unfolded during the elfin...I love the way the story unfolded during the elfin's walk. Your description of the King Qweh was spot on: 'His complexion resembled the gray slate cliffs of Rdegjma on a starless night and his long, silver hair swept behind him like a comet blown on stellar winds.' IN such contrast to the prisoner, the willowy elfin man. So what's going to happen next? A nightmare? <br />Great response to the prompt, Cara.Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-61845234976419396912020-06-18T10:37:55.101-06:002020-06-18T10:37:55.101-06:00I liked this piece of fantasy. It would be interes...I liked this piece of fantasy. It would be interesting to see how it develops. <br />Sonia from https://soniadogra.comA Hundred Quillshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01074191241031721056noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-23464707595124868792020-06-18T05:47:48.163-06:002020-06-18T05:47:48.163-06:00Hi,
I like the intrigue. One doesn't know who ...Hi,<br />I like the intrigue. One doesn't know who this prisoner is but he has power within and even the people notice it. Very good characterization of all the characters. You shows us things that were happening behind the naughty castle. <br />Great job.<br />Shalom aleichem,<br />Pat GPat Garciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04204650731843984192noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-730276380685710492020-06-18T02:43:39.089-06:002020-06-18T02:43:39.089-06:00I'm impressed by how you've painted this w...I'm impressed by how you've painted this world where people can hear things and communicate telepathically but the old brutality and striving for importance remains. Excellent piece of writing. Kalpanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02503951641129389045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-3451901550687005032020-06-17T23:50:16.499-06:002020-06-17T23:50:16.499-06:00I hope the poor fellow would escape somehow. Even ...I hope the poor fellow would escape somehow. Even after this short a snippet, I root for him.Olga Godimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00358026814685611301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4284813757094643990.post-31477531686664852232020-06-17T12:51:42.500-06:002020-06-17T12:51:42.500-06:00Methinks the prisoner knows more than the King. Ve...Methinks the prisoner knows more than the King. Very good start to an intriguing story. Lead on...Yolanda Renéehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09085436784133103221noreply@blogger.com