Diane Clifford Savage woke from a troubled sleep, crying
out.
“My boys! My boys! I’ll save you, I will!”
“Di, wake up.”
The elderly woman’s husband shook her gently. Diane glanced
about the darkened room and burst into tears.
“Oh, Gerry, me wee bairn!”
“Aw, Di, my hinny, please quiet yourself,” Dain Savage
pleaded. “It does nae good to torture yourself this way.”
~Cie for Naughty Netherworld Press~
Notes:
This snippet is from Team Netherworld's current WIP, The Ballad of Gerry Clifford, which is the first book in the Fetch series and part of The Yadira Chronicles.
Our most recently published book, Ketil and Yitzy's Adventure in the Xura Dream House is part of The Yadira Chronicles and Nyarlathotep's Necropolis series and is tied into the Fetch Series.
What an emotional moment to break into a scene. The dialect helps to set the scene.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I enjoy working with various dialects.
DeleteBeautiful snippet , so well written.
ReplyDeleteThank you. :-)
DeleteA dramatic opening!
ReplyDeleteThanks. :-D
DeleteThe snippet raises many questions in just a few words, which would definitely keep the reader turning the pages!
ReplyDeleteThank you. That's what I'm hoping for!
DeleteWow! Talk about a rude awakening. But is it from a dream or a reality. Either, I'd find terribly upsetting. Nice hook!
ReplyDeleteI have a long history of very realistic, frightening dreams. It tends to bleed over into my writing.
DeleteI'm intrigued. What happened to her baby boys? I like that her husband is doing his best to comfort her. :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you. Gerry and Paul are actually Diane's much younger brothers. She was like a second mother to them. Gerry has early onset dementia.
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